Click HERE for naked pictures of Angelina Jolie (title, track)

TrampInaTux · 05-05-2006, 02:00 PM

Something about the way you smile
makes me want to keep you laughing all the while
grab your attention for just a moment
things have died down I gotta keep the ball rolling
Something about the way our eyes meet
look away in shyness but I find it sweet
I wish you knew without me having to tell you (oh no no)
painted pictures in my mind of how we'll see this through
Something about you I cannot put my finger on it
Something about you whatever it is I will not doubt it
Something about you I like not knowing what it is
Something about you I guess it's cos I know you're his...

Really short I know, but I will develop on this later depending on how the verdict is. So then, please PLEASE PLEASE make a comment on this one. Me personally-I think it's alright. But then I would say that, I wrote it. So it's up to you lot whether this gets developed upon or not. Sink or swim?

right-track · 05-05-2006, 02:27 PM

I should lock this thread for false advertising.

Has possibilities...the something, something, something, something lines could be the chorus. Get rid of the 'it's' at the end though.

blackTshirt · 05-05-2006, 02:28 PM

i'm into sweet things at the moment and i find this sweet so i like it

~~under~~ · 05-05-2006, 04:15 PM

What exactly is this thread supposed to be about?

right-track · 05-05-2006, 04:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by H.I.M

What exactly is this thread supposed to be about?

It's in the song writing forum...hazard a guess!

~~under~~ · 05-05-2006, 04:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by right-track

It's in the song writing forum...hazard a guess!

Oh....ummm ok I guess...

explosions-in-my-pants · 05-05-2006, 05:59 PM

to see her naked... she should be in porn, cause half of the movies she is in turn into soft porn... i would imagine half the world has seen her naked by now..

Hobo... the song was very sweet for the type of song/poem it is.. I'm not into ryhming but still i thought it was sweet.. good job.. and whats the realy personal story behide it?

~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ · 05-05-2006, 06:00 PM

What a misleading title! :[

All in all good song, I liked it.

TrampInaTux · 05-06-2006, 02:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants

whats the realy personal story behide it?

There's not a really personal story behind it... it's just a song about the new-relationship vibe you get and everything that comes with it.

05-05-2006, 02:00 PM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Click HERE for naked pictures of Angelina Jolie Something about the way you smile makes me want to keep you laughing all the while grab your attention for just a moment things have died down I gotta keep the ball rolling Something about the way our eyes meet look away in shyness but I find it sweet I wish you knew without me having to tell you (oh no no) painted pictures in my mind of how we'll see this through Something about you I cannot put my finger on it Something about you whatever it is I will not doubt it Something about you I like not knowing what it is Something about you I guess it's cos I know you're his... Really short I know, but I will develop on this later depending on how the verdict is. So then, please PLEASE PLEASE make a comment on this one. Me personally-I think it's alright. But then I would say that, I wrote it. So it's up to you lot whether this gets developed upon or not. Sink or swim?

05-05-2006, 02:28 PM	#3 (permalink)
blackTshirt The Randomness Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: romania.. shut up Posts: 854	i'm into sweet things at the moment and i find this sweet so i like it __________________ My rims never spin, to the contrary You'll find that they're quite stationary.

05-05-2006, 05:59 PM	#7 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	Click HERE for naked pictures of Angelina Jolie to see her naked... she should be in porn, cause half of the movies she is in turn into soft porn... i would imagine half the world has seen her naked by now.. Hobo... the song was very sweet for the type of song/poem it is.. I'm not into ryhming but still i thought it was sweet.. good job.. and whats the realy personal story behide it?

05-05-2006, 02:27 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	I should lock this thread for false advertising. Has possibilities...the something, something, something, something lines could be the chorus. Get rid of the 'it's' at the end though.

05-05-2006, 04:15 PM	#4 (permalink)
~~under~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 1,056	What exactly is this thread supposed to be about?

05-05-2006, 06:00 PM	#8 (permalink)
~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: In the sea... Posts: 252	What a misleading title! :[ All in all good song, I liked it.