Tragic Story of Us

aceofspades · 04-06-2011, 04:12 PM

This is a song I just recently finished writing, would love some feedback.

I just want to be there when you fall,
cause you think you're such a know it all,
I won't be your casualty,
I will survive your killing spree,
You may knock me to the ground,
But I won't stay down

You burden me with agony and you like it,
you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck,
If you gave a **** then you'd admit that you were wrong,
Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us,

What ever happened to empathy,
You don't even care that you're hurting me,
I know for him your clothes will shed,
But it should be me inside your bed,
So forget me, it's what you do,
A poetic tale of de-je-vu

You burden me with agony and you like it,
you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck,
If you gave a **** then you'd admit that you were wrong,
Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us,

So many times before, I've felt this familiar pain,
I've tried to be defiant but loving you I cant refrain,
Emotions comprimised, alone in the fall-out of calamity,
I've been left shattered, crying in desperate vanity,

You burden me with agony and you like it,
you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck,
If you gave a **** then you'd admit that you were wrong,
Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us,

There is no alternate ending,
In the tragic story of us.

lyricsdude · 04-08-2011, 08:22 PM

Me likey! So which genre is this meant to be seen in? (sorry if that makes no sense)

04-06-2011, 04:12 PM	#1 (permalink)
aceofspades Groupie Join Date: Apr 2011 Posts: 5	Tragic Story of Us This is a song I just recently finished writing, would love some feedback. I just want to be there when you fall, cause you think you're such a know it all, I won't be your casualty, I will survive your killing spree, You may knock me to the ground, But I won't stay down You burden me with agony and you like it, you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck, If you gave a ** then you'd admit that you were wrong, Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us, What ever happened to empathy, You don't even care that you're hurting me, I know for him your clothes will shed, But it should be me inside your bed, So forget me, it's what you do, A poetic tale of de-je-vu You burden me with agony and you like it, you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck, If you gave a then you'd admit that you were wrong, Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us, So many times before, I've felt this familiar pain, I've tried to be defiant but loving you I cant refrain, Emotions comprimised, alone in the fall-out of calamity, I've been left shattered, crying in desperate vanity, You burden me with agony and you like it, you say we're friends yet you pretend that you're love struck, If you gave a ** then you'd admit that you were wrong, Forever after is a forgotten chapter in the story of us, There is no alternate ending, In the tragic story of us.

04-08-2011, 08:22 PM	#2 (permalink)
lyricsdude Groupie Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: U.S.A. Posts: 16	Me likey! So which genre is this meant to be seen in? (sorry if that makes no sense)