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explosions-in-my-pants 08-10-2006 09:37 PM

all cause I fell so deep...
 
Such a lie,
that everyone but you can see.
You were the boy for me,
and I,
won't get over you.
Trapped so deep, beneath you feet.

What's ya going to do?
Lost control because of you.
Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts.

I was such a fool for you,
there's no more room for me.
Unhealthy addiction,
no more for me.

It was some time ago
when you left me alone;
I got caught in so deep,
you beat my heart with your fist.

You know there is no use for you,
yet I can't
I can't...
I won't get over you,
cause I love...
Cause I can't
cause fell so deep.
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not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you.

oh and the bolded black part I don't really like after reading it a few times.. cause it kind of seems like every other song.. but I don't know what else to put there.

Raine 08-10-2006 09:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants
Such a lie,
that everyone but you can see.
You were the boy for me,
and I,
won't get over you.
Trapped so deep, beneath you feet.

What's ya going to do?
Lost control because of you.
Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts.

I was such a fool for you,
there's no more room for me.
Unhealthy addiction,
no more for me.

It was some time ago
when you left me alone;
I got caught in so deep,
you beat my heart with your fist.

You know there is no use for you,
yet I can't
I can't...
I won't get over you,
cause I love...
Cause I can't
cause fell so deep.
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not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you.

You more or less touch on three different elements of a relationship that a girl wishes existed, but you have nothing to tie them altogether.
There doesn't seem to be much holding your last stanza together. And the last line doesn't seem well thought out

explosions-in-my-pants 08-10-2006 09:47 PM

I don't see why any girl would want any of that to be in a relationship.

Raine 08-10-2006 09:55 PM

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Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants
I don't see why any girl would want any of that to be in a relationship.

what would you rather I call it

explosions-in-my-pants 08-10-2006 10:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine
what would you rather I call it

why would the girl want the guy that broke her heart to know that he really hurt her that much if it doesn't make a difference?
why would she want him to know that she doesn't even TRY to get over him.
she still hopes.
there all pretty much fears that no girl would want there ex boyfriend to know.. thats what everyone knows but him.

Raine 08-10-2006 10:14 PM

You didn't answer the question.
I think I know what Urban means

explosions-in-my-pants 08-10-2006 10:15 PM

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Originally Posted by Raine
You didn't answer the question.

which was?what would you rather I call it
Quote:

I think I know what Urban means
which is suppose to mean? what is Urban saying?

Raine 08-10-2006 10:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants
which was?what would you rather I call it

that would be the one

Quote:

which is suppose to mean? what is Urban saying?
urban isn't saying anything to me at the moment.
I was just thinking about something he said.
I didn't mean to post that particular comment. I just thought about it.
Just forget about it

explosions-in-my-pants 08-10-2006 10:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine
that would be the one


urban isn't saying anything to me at the moment.
I was just thinking about something he said.
I didn't mean to post that particular comment. I just thought about it.
Just forget about it

great! well both of you please stop talking about me.

What would I call it.. what every girl wishes would never happen.. or at least wishes it would never get to that point.

Raine 08-10-2006 10:24 PM

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Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants
great! well both of you please stop talking about me.

What would I call it.. what every girl wishes would never happen.. or at least wishes it would never get to that point.

i wasn't talking about you to urban . . .
ah . .
you're driving me bonkers woman :)


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