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She Left With My Heart Destined To Never Return
I need alot of suggestions on this one. Please!!
She Left With My Heart Destined To Never Return My heart cries Every passing day it dies alittle more The scars that won't heal The lonlieness is forever more She left with my heart Destined to never return She said those famous last words That still haunts my memory Every tear that I cry reminds me of how much rejection hurts I wish I can find a way out of this four walled world Rejections cold, love hurts It's the story of my life And the haunting reality Life is un fair and to difficult to figure out The once heart of gold, tarnished by heart break People say soul mates are hard to come by The one's that find them are treated with eternal happiness For the rest of us All we're left with is A heart full of thorns and an eye full of tears. |
How's this, drop the teenage angst, get rid of all the cliches, and try saying something original.
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I only read the first three lines before deciding to second that yep.
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I read them all because I thought that there might be one that was decent but no this is complete crap. Throw this shite away.
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..and burn it. and take the ashes, and send them into space.
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Maybe if you took the time out of your lives and read what I put on the top. it says SUGGESTIONS PLEASE!!!!! thats what I would like.
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I was suggestive. There isn't anything good about it. The topic is trite and the wording is horrible. Try again. |
Any suggestions on how to make it better.
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