Haight Ashbury
 

They Cared And Loved More Than Any Today
Sang Rejoiced In Happiness Just For A Peaceful Way
And Know We Lost The Path To Friendship Ina Hurry
Becuase It All Started On The Corner Of Haight And Ashbury


I Feel You Dont Know Me And You Prolly Dont Care
To Get Inside My Truth To Know What's In My Head
To Realize Im Commitng On Whats Left Of The Peace
And Have Faith On The Fact Im Not Doing It For Me

Is Too Hard To Trust The People Now Days
As The Lay Thier Oppinions On Your Thoughts
We Came Together Once Before To Eliminate The Negative
But When One Manson Took Lead We Lost Perspective

Did Hippies Have The Idea Before One Wrong Turn
As Haight And Ashbury Quickly Rose To Peace
I Would Have Been San Fran Bound Without Regret
But Then It Happened Too Infamous To Forget

This Is Not A Song A Poem Or Sonnet
But My Feelings In General I Dont Expect You All To Under Stand But If You Do Thank You And If You Dont Thank You For Reading Anyway

So...are you posting every poem/song you've ever written?

all my stuff lol
 

nah i wrote i think 4 of those in the same day
i have alot of stuff but im trying new stuff to see who or if any like it

there's too many spelling and gramatical errors for one thing, it's distracting as hell, and hard to take it seriously at all. fix that.

otherwise, a lot of the rhyming is REALLY forced, especially the last two lines, the only way that rhyming a word with the same word ever works is if there's a message and a reason behind the repitition, in your case it just comes across as laziness. It could be a decent piece, but i'd suggest going over it, thinking over the vocabulary a bit more, and stating a more concentrated message. At the moment it's just a very generi poem about peace and a location, there's no message to it at all.