She Crowes Like A Cat
 

her sudden beauty and constant grace
no need of makeup on this face
instantly stunning to all who see
her fly into the room were in

she's the smartest girl ive ever met
will not judge will not forget
red hair with brown eyes
lovely legs lovely smile

thats why she crowes like a cat
as beautiful as she is
she knows its not about that
she knows its hard to live

continues to prove her place in life
continues to move with grace at night
loves me for who i am
loves me for who i am

so she flys around but purrs if need
cause she understands what life means
she said its to live in hope enjoy friends
live in peace and make amends


another high one

Haha, I like how my name is used in this! A+

Pretty sure cats don't crow. That's just me.

I'm pretty sure avatars with motion are real pretentious, that's just me.

I don't see why...

It makes it kind of hard to read the post, that's just me.

What's that got to do with pretension though?

it's like it's saying my avatar's cooler than most because it moves

That's kinda presumptuous, but to each his own.

alright it's not pretentious, it just makes it difficult to read the text, and the avatar itself isn't any better than a normal one

Wow. Now that it's over I can't believe I spent my time debating that.

Ausedtoolguy

can i complain about how big you font size on your sig is then?

its distracting me from your post.

and at raconteur, thanks for the no-caps.:)

I just figured there was no way it worse than Momma Garner's sig.

You know what'd be great? If everywhere I post you didn't try to put me down. Lol. I mean, it's not that you're succeeding, but your posts are a waste of fucking time. Lol.

guys guys lets just write ill use spell check
and just try to actually read the writings
all of them if you can
we shoud try to make each other positive
constructive criticism not harmful indangerment
ps where in the hell is the spell check deal im not downloading it
peace love music

This thread is a waste of the internet.

ROFL. Pwned.

theusedtoolguy, stop being such a tool, honestly, if you're going to go out of your way to insult members, at least make it relevant to the thread topic and not be so much of a bullsh*t waste of space post as the one you posted.

theraconteur21, props on cleaning up the spelling and grammer, this way it's not distracting and people can concentrate on the actual poem. Is IS VERY important to do this, because if you can't even take the time to make your poems and songs follow propper gramatical structure, none of us are going to want to take the time to critique it. As for the poem itself, there's some continuity issues here. What I mean by that, is that you've used a lot of different metaphors and analogies, so the point ends up being muddled in all of this. Simplify it by finding one analogy for the ENTIRE song.

well see i did
but because we cant relate you might not understand
its just about a girl who dosnt care to be with the one she loves
just because shes a bird dosnt mean shes a cat
NO spell check SRY