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andykoivisto 05-04-2007 05:22 PM

Honestly
 
Do you remember our relationship
the days we spent together
honestly, i dont
i forgot about it




sorry

Ace 05-06-2007 05:04 PM

.......if you were typing that into someone's email, you kinda ****ed up buddy.
Wrong window.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes 05-07-2007 12:36 AM

Lmao.

right-track 05-07-2007 04:34 AM

It's brilliant, bordering on genius!

It conjures up a failed relationship and hints at the bitterness of the author.
It's clear the writer has been wronged by the individual this was aimed at and it's intentional vagueness of gender is a masterstroke, rendering the piece truly universal.

"Do you remember our relationship,
the days we spent together"

There's the leading question, it's purpose is clear.
The intent to lull the recipient into a false sense of nostalgia and of a love that was.

Then the sting and with it, all that a love spurned represents.

"honestly,
I don't.
I forgot about it".

It reeks of bitterness and betrayal, it's designed to cut deep, as deep as the wounds the subject matter inflicted on the writer.
Revenge!

"sorry"

A nod of recognition for the pain re-paid.

The minimalism of this work is a trick of the eye.
And on closer examination, each word is a brushstroke.
It's been said, "a picture paints a thousand words"...here, the opposite applies.















Actually...on second thoughts...it was shite!

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes 05-07-2007 08:14 AM

LOLZ, R-T. I love your humor.

andykoivisto 05-07-2007 04:23 PM

This wasnt an email, it was my attempt at song writing.


Personally I thought it was perfect, r-t summed it up, all the emotion and heartbreak that when into writing this.

either/or 05-10-2007 02:02 AM

you having a laugh? it sounded like one side of a boring conversation by two virgin lovers


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