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Old 03-31-2008, 06:05 AM   #1 (permalink)
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here are some lyrics to an as-of-yet unnamed song.

you laid and the seasons brought you sleep was it everything you hoped for girl did the grass fold and snap under your back did the branches beg to be broken was it just like you said did you smile did you dream will you dream will you dream will you dream?

Any comments or critiques are appreciated.
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Old 04-05-2008, 06:58 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Well, firstly, try to type it like it's a poem. Makes things a whole lot easier. Especially when it comes to...critiquing it, singing it, displaying it period.
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Old 04-13-2008, 05:37 PM   #3 (permalink)
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flip flop grass and branches i think thatd be cool
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