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SkyLucy 10-17-2008 06:11 PM

#5
 
Just need some opinions if you'd oblige...I've been listening to a lot of Yeah Yeah Yeahs lately... Karen O. is the my mad-muse/goddess


Oh feels so good,
what a wonderful feeling,
to hear that gunshot pop

come on honey,
it's just for laughs
watch suicide rates hop

I wish you could take
a trip in my mind
and use what you see
to explain this all back to me

Nobody cares
if you're scared
we just want blood
it's good t.v.

I keep my promises
I keep my promises
here is the cave, come crawl inside
here is the cave come crawl inside
you spelunk
I spelunk
all it is
is a nice hot.....


I thought of you last night
with my hands behind my head
I wondered where you were
as I twisted in my bed..



And now......my hands are dry

FaSho 10-17-2008 06:12 PM

"Nobody cares
if you're scared
we just want blood
it's good t.v."

love it.

SkyLucy 10-17-2008 06:13 PM

Thanks ^__^

SkyLucy 10-17-2008 06:23 PM

I guess I could be promoting myself, but I've got 6 or seven songs written, most with melodies except one or two. I just can't figure out instrumentation for the life of me -___-

SkyLucy 10-17-2008 08:59 PM

Well, I mightaswell post one other thing, see if anyone has any mind about that...better than making a million and one threads of my songs..

So there's an itching in my mind
I wish I had a knife
to stab out all the words
That take over my life

With the burning in my throat
And the pulsing of my veins
A scratching in my skin
My eyes are wrapped in chains

I'd give my taste for all the kisses
of lovers gone and past,
My smell for all the flowers, wilting
fated, never last
My hearing for all the songs
you never sang to me
My sight for all your lovers
I hope I'll never see

Give me the knife
Give me the pen
I'll scrawl all the things
bursting from my brain

The world is yours
Your life is yours
My world is yours
My life is mine

WendyCal 10-18-2008 12:22 AM

This is really good

but you knew that.

You say that you have melodies laid out? How does this song do a downward pointed triangle in your music?

Oh! And i suppose i should ask the genre ~ THAT would probably make a BIG diff! :rofl:

SkyLucy 10-18-2008 01:39 PM

What do you mean 'downward pointed triangle'?

And the second song is one of the only two without melodies as yet...but it's like Imogen Heap's 'Speeding Cars' song...if that makes sense.

kaleidoscope.. 11-20-2008 07:19 PM

These are awesome songs...
I love it...

"Nobody cares
if you're scared
we just want blood
it's good t.v."

that really is cool...

I'm impressed with the way you told the story of it without using many words..
hard to do..

good job

SkyLucy 11-26-2008 03:47 PM

Ha, thanks :p I really appreciate the feedback


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