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Ray Davies 02-16-2009 03:31 PM

I wrote this ages ago but you might like it
 
Dirty old river, must you keep rolling
Flowing into the night
People so busy, makes me feel dizzy
Taxi light shines so bright
But I dont need no friends
As long as I gaze on waterloo sunset
I am in paradise

Every day I look at the world from my window
But chilly, chilly is the evening time
Waterloo sunsets fine

Terry meets julie, waterloo station
Every friday night
But I am so lazy, dont want to wander
I stay at home at night
But I dont feel afraid
As long as I gaze on waterloo sunset
I am in paradise

Every day I look at the world from my window
But chilly, chilly is the evening time
Waterloo sunsets fine

Millions of people swarming like flies round waterloo underground
But terry and julie cross over the river
Where they feel safe and sound
And the dont need no friends
As long as they gaze on waterloo sunset
They are in paradise

Waterloo sunsets fine

Akira 02-16-2009 03:32 PM

:D

I woulda done this, had I been a mod, lol.

Janszoon 02-16-2009 03:35 PM

Hey Ray, those are pretty good lyrics. You should try putting some music to them or something.

right-track 02-16-2009 04:28 PM

Far too many cliches. e.g; "Millions of people swarming like flies"
And lose this line "But chilly, chilly is the evening time" = cheese on toast.

Not bad for a first effort though.

BoopieJones 02-16-2009 10:59 PM

I liked it - I think it would be interesting to listen to

Schizotypic 02-25-2009 07:50 PM

I liked it. It was a lot different from msot of the poetry I hear.

ProggyMan 02-25-2009 08:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Schizotypic (Post 603239)
I liked it. It was a lot different from msot of the poetry I hear.

Lol.


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