Haiku: Time, free them
 

Possibly to a moderator: I posted this thread a couple hours ago only to find later that it was not anywhere to be found in the songwriting forum. I then checked my own posts to see if it was my mistake, and I found it in that thread. So if you moved it for some reason (because it is not allowed as a thread), please notify me via PM as to the reasons why (I don't remember reading anything against it in the rules) after you delete my second attempt at it.

haikus indeed show
The talent of one, yet not
in this case I fear.


Just messin with you. This is an interesting poem.

"My young sickly flowers" = sin?

nice.

No, not sin.
You know though, when I write I try to make good metaphors but my meaning is (most likely) usually lost in vagueness I'm realizing. So, take from it what you do and if you like what you take- keep it, it's yours.