Need YOUR opinion please! Lyrics
 

been writing lyrics for a couple months, just trying new things all the time. This is one that ive only just started. Might seem a bit ****ed up when its not sung on a beat :/ anyway..

Sitin here in a dark spot with ma lap-top
still smashed from the last joint,
motherfu*kers still grabbed by ma last song,
"crazy days" was ma last stop,
all a did was open note pad and then blast on
jottin words till am bored or till am past points
a can keep goin like andy goram saving slap shots
but slap shots is a hokey term and andy goram was a soccer goaly
holy s*** you totally wrecked ma rap song
and this is ma song, this is ma story
but am not from balamory, am fae paisley,
a stay crazy, and a do ma job every day,
but only it pays daily
a need cash, everbodys on the same boat
i'd do anythin expect from f*** a male goat
f*** that, f*** wit, f*** who, f*** them
f*** the government cos theyd send anyone out to war, but them

I quite like them, actually. It's nothing deep or anything, but it doesn't try to be... which on this forum is quite refreshing. The bits about writing the song were a nice tongue-in-cheek type thing. My only complaint is the last line doesn't seem to fit, but I don't know how the beat might fix that up.

Keep doing it.

Thanks man. Yeh it looks as if it wouldnt fit but surprisingly it goes quite well with the instrumental im using. I'll post more as i progress, and maybe if its allowed i can post the finished recording when i get it done.

Its hard to read somebody's flow, but i'm sure it rapped would sound better than me trying to read it, lol

Ive carried the song on and done about a minute and a halfs worth of lyrics, is it ok to upload it to speedyshare or something and post a link here?