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Dopplganger5 06-12-2010 10:10 PM

I'm trying to write a song...help.
 
All i have is the chorus. I'm writing it for my fiancee and i was wondering what you think of it so far and if you have any pointers on the verses or anything..


When you were happy everything seemed to shine
When you were happy My life was so sublime
But now will you forgive me
Of my crime
And show me the light of love
Tonight.


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