New guy!
 

Hi people,
I'm a little new to this, well, new to asking for opnions from more experienced folk.Started writing songs a while ago when I took up on the guitar, midlife n all that ha! Anyways, heres a couple of songs i wrote n would be glad of any comments, good or bad,cheers muckas!

song 1 I Remember

I remember, when you kissed me.
Secret, emotions shining on through
You pulled me, close and held me tight
Tempting, me deep into the night

I remember, when you touched me
Our inner, souls they were entwined
Now in your, hands you hold my heart
Feel its, pain when we have to part

I could walk to the moon for you
And embrace the sun for you
I'd swim the oceans in a day
To be the one with whom you lay

I remember, when you blessed me
Your presence, brilliant as the morning sun
You bathed me in your radiant light
Now I've, found a meaning to this life

I remember, when you kissed me
Secret, emotions shining on through
You pulled me, close and held me tight
Tempting, me deep into your life

I could walk to the moon for you
And embrace the sun for you
I'd swim the oceans in a day
To be the one with whom you stay
x 2


song 2 You know you want to

I wanna buy you flowers everyday
And watch over you where you lay
Run my fingers through your hair
Then undress you till your bare

I feel you want to
I know you want to
You know you want to
So show me you want to

I wanna phone you every hour
I need to soap you in the shower
Kiss the dimples on your back
And give your ass a playful smack

I feel you want to
I know you want you
You know you want to
So show me you want to

I'd give you diamonds every day
In the forlorn hope of a lay
I wanna tease you with my tongue
And then watch you come undone
I think I'll have a heart attack
If you ever treat me this way back

Repeat verse 3

I feel you want to
I know you want to
You know you want to
So show me you want to
x2

So, there you go.comments invited please.The songs do have tunes to them on dhanley72 on youtube, the recordings aren't brilliant but gives a good idea how i 'hear' the words i write.Happy reading folks.