an unfinished poem i called Dead... comments?
 

Always Asleep,
counting Sheep,
Never Awake,
through an earthquake,
still wont wake,
not even turn in my sleep,
it seems i am dead,
if i can take off my head

please tell me if dis is good chizz plzzz

Can I tell you if it's ridiculously bad?

i dont relly mind much... i kno its complete crap :P

Consider it done.

haha, i relly need help with this song writing crap

If it's just "song writing crap" to you, then I don't think you'll ever get anywhere with it.

ah, whatever.. i dont relly care if i get anywhere in song writing

The real question is do you really care about writing songs, regardless of whether you get anywhere or not.