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GreenDAY23 01-28-2014 12:01 AM

Where have the times gone?
 
Here's one of my first songs I've written (put in the chords so you get a better sense of timing), it's basically about how my friends and I used to live such a wild life, but now that most of them are in college I'm sitting at home with the feeling of nostalgia.

[Verse :]

----D -----------A
It's been quite a while
------C------------------G
Since I've been about the town
---C-----------------A
Am I crazy or just hostile?

D---------------A
Nights were the days
----C-------------G
Not that it matters much
------C-----------------------------A
Never really loosing light from where I lay

[Pre-Chorus :]

C---------D----------------A
I've got a disease it's called Insomnia
C----------D-------------A
Fear of the dawn, morning phobia?

[Chorus :]

--D--------------------B A
A years gone by, maybe two
-----C----------------------G
What happened? The curtain drew
--D-------------------B A
Nostalgia that feelings shown
--------C
And I'm asking myself, where have the times

[Interlude :]

G----G---B C
gone?

G G B A
G G B C
G A

That's it so far. One of my first so don't be too harsh, but what do you think its missing ? You think it makes sense?

Freebase Dali 01-28-2014 12:07 AM

I'm just wondering what a "head file" is.

GreenDAY23 01-28-2014 12:21 AM

Supposed to be like head case, but it didn't rhyme with while :p you think there's a better word that goes with file?

Janszoon 01-28-2014 03:33 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GreenDAY23 (Post 1411075)
Supposed to be like head case, but it didn't rhyme with while :p you think there's a better word that goes with file?

Pedophile?

Vince 01-28-2014 10:43 AM

What I do in my songs is ask "why" a lot. For instance, why do you feel nostalgia? Why were those times so good? We the listeners/readers don't know, and your music/poetry comes to life in the details.

GreenDAY23 02-02-2014 02:50 AM

Thanks a lot for the replies, great advice too I'll think of why and edit some of the lyrics.

Sculptor 02-02-2014 05:14 AM

Reminds me of my life bro.

xLizardx 02-02-2014 10:57 AM

I like it - for the line "A hooligan or maybe a head file?" How about changing it to "A hooligan in denial?" or "A headcase in denial?" or "Am I crazy or just hostile?" or "I feel like a mental patient on trial" or "A hooligan with a crazy smile" or "I'm out of touch, out of style" or "I'm out of touch, in denial".

I use RhymeZone rhyming dictionary and thesaurus a lot, and also an online Thesaurus. Anyway, I like your concept, and the lyrics sound like they might have a good hook. You should record a version and upload it, I'm interested to see how you sing it. :)

GreenDAY23 02-05-2014 10:49 PM

@Sculptor
Damn didn't think people would be able to relate to it!

@Lizard
Wow amazing suggestions, I'll use "am I crazy or just hostile?" I really like that.


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