Hypnotaize

I'm just starting out songwriting, so I don't expect anything more than sh*t. Actually, I'm intending to throw this bit out, but I'd like to use it as an example for some comments and what to do/not to do. Thanks!


(My friends and I recently started an alt-rock band, but we're not too great with lyrics)

When I was young
I thought that TV shows
Were played out behind the screen
I was too scared to hide
Behind the TV

I thought it’d all be good
I thought we’d all turn out okay
I never thought I could
Hide from the light of day

When I was little
I thought that the moon
Floated right along
My mother’s car
Along for the ride

I thought it’d all be good
I thought we’d all turn out okay
I never thought I could
Hide from the light of day

I used to think that
Stoplights were controlled
By miniature men
Deciding what’s red

I thought it’d all be good
I thought we’d all turn out okay
I never thought I could
Hide from the light of day

I used to have dreams
Acting behind TVs
Flying to the moon
When I was little
I had plans

I thought it’d all be good
I thought we’d all turn out okay
I never thought I could
Hide from the light of day

I thought it’d all be good
I thought we’d all turn out okay
I never thought I could
Hide from the light of day