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_The_Repeats_ 07-12-2005 07:14 AM

Diamond dressed.
 
I know I always post lyrics, but I never really know which ones to use... Tell me if these are any good?

Brushing the diamonds from her dress,
She doesn't need them anymore,
She blew him a kiss,
As they fell to the floor...
They sparkled so bright,
Just like her smile,
She wouldn't need them,
For a very long while.

Her red heart blossomed,
As his hands touched her skin,
She felt her heart beating,
So fast from within.

She spoke her thoughts,
And spat her mind,
Never caring,
What she left behind,
'Cause she'd found him,
And he'd found her,
Her tears could remember,
How happy they were.

Her red heart blossomed,
As his hands touched her skin,
She felt her heart beating,
So fast from within.

He took the rose,
That she had kissed,
She was just another girl,
On his list.
She was beauty,
She had love and light,
But she let him leave,
Without a fight...

Her red heart blossomed,
As his hands touched her skin,
She felt her heart beating,
So fast from within.

'Cause she thought,
He'd love her too,
Without being told,
What to do.
So when he left,
She fell to the floor,
She's not anyone,
Anymore.

pastor of muppets 07-12-2005 07:15 AM

yep... likin it :)

blackTshirt 07-12-2005 07:17 AM

i like it too, except this part

"He took the rose,
That she had kissed,
She was just another girl,
On his list.
She was beauty,
She had love and light,
But she let him leave,
Without a fight..."

_The_Repeats_ 07-12-2005 07:20 AM

Thanks. Aha, uhm yeah, I thought the "She had love and light," bit sounded a little odd. Any suggestions? Change it, take it out?

pastor of muppets 07-12-2005 07:21 AM

mmm dunno... kinda like it... cant think of anything else that would fit....

blackTshirt 07-12-2005 07:22 AM

no, i like that part
i don't like these parts

"She was just another girl,
On his list."

and

"But she let him leave,
Without a fight"

_The_Repeats_ 07-12-2005 07:32 AM

Okay. Does this work any better?

He took the rose,
That she had kissed,
But it wasn't her,
That he had missed.
She was beauty,
She had love and light,
But he'd had enough,
And left that night...

blackTshirt 07-12-2005 07:36 AM

awwww.. you changed it just cause i said it's not that pretty.... *blushes*

well.. it's better. but just leave it the way you feel it's better, ok? ;)

pastor of muppets 07-12-2005 07:39 AM

i think that ways good....


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