Tell me what u think seriously please (lyrics, single, member)

angel18 · 07-10-2005, 02:46 PM

She

She was a beautiful person to me
She was kind and caring
She always smiled when I’d see her
She would talk about all the things I loved

Little did she know I loved everything about her?
Little did she know I always talked about her?
Little by little I grew to love her more and more

If only I could see her now
If only I could remember her smile
If only I didn’t leave home
If only I had stayed and been with her

I wish I could turn back time
I want to come back home
I want her to be alive today

Why did she have to die?
Why was it so painful?
Why didn’t someone help her?
Why didn’t she live to see me today?

My life is not worth living
My life is not worth crying for
My life is so complicated
My life is incomplete without her

My life is not worth living
My life is not worth crying for
My life is so complicated
My life is incomplete without her

right-track · 07-10-2005, 02:51 PM

I'd say you truly meant every single word of this. If it's not too personal a question, is this based on personal experience?

_The_Repeats_ · 07-10-2005, 03:10 PM

It's really good. I personally think maybe you should use more rhyme? That's up to preference though. My favourite line is "If only I could remember her smile..." 'Tis beautiful...keep going. And comment on mine if you like?

Delusion · 07-11-2005, 09:55 AM

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Originally Posted by right-track

is this based on personal experience?

Thats what it sounds like to me aswell.
Good though!

1337 Sam · 07-11-2005, 11:25 AM

Good lyrics, very 'personal'.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 07-11-2005, 12:00 PM

its a little too..."kill yourself"ish for my taste....and its a little repetitve...the poetry of it is nice though.

angel18 · 07-11-2005, 02:08 PM

it's not actually based on an experience, it just popped into my head and i wrote it down so

madguru · 07-11-2005, 02:30 PM

to me its repetitive and whiney, almost My chemical Romance isque

but keep truckin

Delusion · 07-12-2005, 08:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by angel18

it's not actually based on an experience, it just popped into my head and i wrote it down so

thats what they all say..i bet she's hidden under the floorboards rite?

angel18 · 07-12-2005, 09:23 AM

u could say that yes

07-10-2005, 02:46 PM	#1 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Tell me what u think seriously please She She was a beautiful person to me She was kind and caring She always smiled when I’d see her She would talk about all the things I loved Little did she know I loved everything about her? Little did she know I always talked about her? Little by little I grew to love her more and more If only I could see her now If only I could remember her smile If only I didn’t leave home If only I had stayed and been with her I wish I could turn back time I want to come back home I want her to be alive today Why did she have to die? Why was it so painful? Why didn’t someone help her? Why didn’t she live to see me today? My life is not worth living My life is not worth crying for My life is so complicated My life is incomplete without her My life is not worth living My life is not worth crying for My life is so complicated My life is incomplete without her

07-10-2005, 03:10 PM	#3 (permalink)
_The_Repeats_ Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Oxford. Woo yeah. Ehem. Posts: 58	It's really good. I personally think maybe you should use more rhyme? That's up to preference though. My favourite line is "If only I could remember her smile..." 'Tis beautiful...keep going. And comment on mine if you like? __________________ I never wanted to love you, but that's okay... I always knew that you'd leave me anyway. You're treading on awfully thin ice darling, it's so awfully thin. It's almost turning to water, as we speak. *~~#You.Are.Too.Far.Gone.^'\|\|¬.

07-11-2005, 02:30 PM	#8 (permalink)
madguru Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: my bed Posts: 12	to me its repetitive and whiney, almost My chemical Romance isque but keep truckin __________________ \|h\|o\|p\|s\|c\|o\|t\|c\|h\| my Anti-Drug

07-10-2005, 02:51 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	I'd say you truly meant every single word of this. If it's not too personal a question, is this based on personal experience?

07-11-2005, 02:08 PM	#7 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	it's not actually based on an experience, it just popped into my head and i wrote it down so

07-12-2005, 09:23 AM	#10 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	u could say that yes