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DarthNeBuL 04-21-2015 02:30 AM

My song(?) lyrics / poetry
 
Well, this is my first work. I dunno if it's a song or poetry, looks like something in-between, actually :D
Even though English is not my native language, hope it's not that bad. Looking forward to constructive criticism and thoughts!

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The breaking point.

Whether you regret it or not,
You can't just stay in my plot,
I cannot anymore trust you,
Everything turned out to be blue..

But how on earth can I deny
Those magical moments - you were mine..
I wouldn't believe they could pass by
And leave only foul play on my mind..

I struggle again,
And pain never ends,
I try to forget,
But drowning instead..
I think it's a trap,
It's our dead-end..

But how on earth can I deny
Those magical moments - you were mine..
I wouldn't believe they could pass by
And leave only foul play on my mind..

We finally meet during street walk,
You lower your eyes, even can't talk,
We both understand that we share
This suffering, pain and nightmares..
But nothing can flock us together -
We're not now birds of a feather..

But how on earth can I deny
Those magical moments - you were mine..
I wouldn't believe they could pass by
And leave only foul play on my mind..

But finally.. struggle has gone.
I don't any longer belong
With girl, who has drained my soul.
And now, all the woe has gone..
It seems my catharsis has come..

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And there is another one, I wrote it a bit earlier. I devoted it to Taylor Swift (on her 25th birthday) - my favorite singer.

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I was in some cave,
Sitting in the dark,
Trying to stay brave,
Not to fall apart.
You found me, you found me, you found me..

Your voice did guide me out
Of impenetrable night,
And only you could turn
My darkness into light.

Despite you're just young girl,
Pretending to be rife,
Your music easy fills
My emptiness inside.

Some day I will be safe,
And as my way was tough,
I will remember you,
Ms. Taylor Swift, my love.

DarthNeBuL 06-02-2015 09:36 AM

You didn't answer, so i guess it was just terrible.

However, I'm not gonna surrender that easily. This time let me introduce a little piece of poetry:

Overcoming obstacles (in relationship):

Let the light come through the clouds,
Trough the darkness of your life,
To the very underground of your heart
And turn it bright.

Change your mindset for the better -
Do those quarrels really matter?
When you think through time and space
Of some things that truly matter,
You'll find out that love is better,
You'll get out of this phase.

Step by step you're closing that gap
Of nightmares and pain and rue,
Waking up after your long nap,
Realizing what is true..

Shining hair, bend of eyebrow,
Shimmering of smiling face,
Forming flame out of just sparklet,
Turning heads like lightning blaze..
Once again she comes on top of
Your offense and her mistakes.

Having dealt with all the doubts,
Faith is coming back to you,
Being lifted off the ground,
Punching through the wall of blue.
Nothing can now put you down,
You're together - that is true!


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