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Old 05-28-2015, 06:45 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Please rate my first song!

Any constructive critisism would be great, maybe it's a little long, but it's a pretty fast moving song

Titled: Light At the End of the Tunnel (Think)

Hello again, it's been a while, But I still remember your smile
and It seems like yesterday, I was asking you to stay
But now you're gone, and on and on my heart goes
Trying to fill the gaping hole you made

You're the light at the end of my tunnel
The deepest dark place for me
You're my bail out when I'm in trouble
I just need you next to me
Cuz when you're gone I get distracted
My feelings go radioactive
Cuz you're my light at the end of my tunnel
And I need you next to me

My heart goes on and on Reminding me of times gone by
And maybe it was telling me, all along, a little lie
Did you really care? Or was it all inside my head
Please explain to me, or I might as well be dead

Think of all the memories, think of all the times
Think of all times when your eyes met mine
Think of all those words you said, think of my replies
Think of those emotions we pushed down the well to die
Think of all the dreams we shared, think of how they went
Think of how we tried to make a compromise to send
Think of all the plans we made, now those are key
And above all, please please think of me

Don't forget to think of me
I will always think of you

Cuz you're the light at the end of my tunnel
The deepest dark place for me
You're my bail out when I'm in trouble
I just need you next to me
Cuz when you're gone I get distracted
My feelings go radioactive
Cuz you're my light at the end of my tunnel
And I need you next to me

There are plenty of rubies on my left side, emeralds on my right
Men carry their own gem, they won't give up without a fight
I know I want one, and I reach out, then a thought hits me with a shout
The cave's illuminated at the exit, by a diamond the size of my fist.
I just Need to wait, wait for it to come
Sacrifice my present happiness for future sum
It will all be worth it, worth it in the end
I just hope it gets the cheesy letters I send

Think of all the memories, think of all the times
Think of all times when your eyes met mine
Think of all those words you said, think of my replies
Think of those emotions we pushed down the well to die
Think of all the dreams we shared, think of how they went
Think of how we tried to make a compromise to send
Think of all the plans we made, now those are key
And above all, please please think of me

Don't forget to think of me
I will always think of you

Cuz you're the light at the end of my tunnel
The deepest dark place for me
You're my bail out when I'm in trouble
I just need you next to me
Cuz when you're gone I get distracted
My feelings go radioactive
Cuz you're my light at the end of my tunnel
And I need you next to me

So give me your all, show me how you ball, If we make it or not is your call
I'm as loyal as a dog, I will be there, it's up to you to decide how we fare
Will we make it? Or will we fall? I promise I will stand tall
Don't pull me down, I will not frown, if we make it through I'll give you a crown

Think of all the memories, think of all the times
Think of all times when your eyes met mine
Think of all those words you said, think of my replies
Think of those emotions we pushed down the well to die
Think of all the dreams we shared, think of how they went
Think of how we tried to make a compromise to send
Think of all the plans we made, now those are key
And above all, please please think of me

Don't forget to think of me
I will always think of you

Cuz you're the light at the end of my tunnel
The deepest dark place for me
You're my bail out when I'm in trouble
I just need you next to me
Cuz when you're gone I get distracted
My feelings go radioactive
Cuz you're the light at the end of my tunnel
And I need you next to me
You're the light at the end of my tunnel
from you ill never be free
You're the light at the end of my tunnel
That's how I want it to be
You're the light at the end of my tunnel
I need you next to me
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Old 06-02-2015, 01:24 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I Like it!!! could i maybe use these lyrics in a song of mine in the future?? I'll credit you for the lyrics of course. Thanks
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Old 06-02-2015, 07:52 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I'm away from all instruments for the the rest of the summer, and fruity loops is being bratty, so I wouldn't be able to hear it come to fruition. But I'm interested how you use them! Send me the song when you're done!
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