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little_dead_girl 07-20-2005 01:48 PM


Lost in herself

She could not find a way out.

All the lies she told, people she’d hurt.

No one could help her now.

Screaming, crying,

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow

She pleaded for help but no one, no one could save her

Not now, not after all that had happened.

She tried to run but it held her back

She tried to forget all that happened

She tried to be different

But something held her back

She was always the quiet one,

The innocent one, the happy one

On the outside

But on the inside just a lost girl

Trying to find her way out.

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow

And all was lost.

All was lost so she ran

She ran back, back to the life she had once abused

The life she hated.

But she lived it again

She brought more pain to herself

She had to,

To be noticed. To be loved

By someone, something she had always wanted

Always dreamed of, always reached out to

But could never catch.

This girl is lost, She needs a home

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow,

She screamed then found her home

This girl is dying

She has so much love but so much hate

She needs to get out she needs to find herself.

She tried to get help from hurting,

Hurting herself.

She thought it was the only way,

But she realised all she needed was someone,

Someone to hold her someone to love her,

She could not find anyone,

And it brought pain,

It brought tears to her eyes,

It brought her death…

(hi this is just a poem/song i wrote in one of my classes)

riseagainstrocks 07-22-2005 02:11 PM

you listen to the Used don't you.

go kill yourself. you talk about it enough.

little_dead_girl 07-26-2005 01:04 PM

that was kinda mean..........yea i listen to the used but the song has nothing to do with them.......and yea it's bout me bt i dont wanna kill myself it's just how i think i feel wel i duno.i cant reli explain it.

HuKitKat 07-26-2005 01:25 PM

you explained it quite well in the poem.
It's just you would feel weird if you said it plainly.
but dont kill yourself.
u a cutter?

little_dead_girl 07-28-2005 01:21 PM

wel i cut myself once b4 bt it wasnt much n i'm not palnning on doing it agen...unless things get reli bad

HuKitKat 07-28-2005 01:26 PM

dont really know much about cuttn, but i've seen a few documentaries on it.

but looking at your poem/song, you manage to use simple words to portray huge emotion and thats good in a writer. Many self-proclaimed poets nowadays think that by using every word in a thesaurus, they make great poetry, and that's not always the case.

cant really see it as a performance piece, but your skills are valuable. keep working!

Urban Hat€monger ? 07-28-2005 01:32 PM

Does anyone not write about things these days other than 'i hate myself whaaaaaaa whaaaaaa whaaaaaa'

Seriously , cut out all the self pity & actually have a go at trying to be creative.

ArtistInTheAmbulance 07-28-2005 02:38 PM

A lot of the writers are teens, therefore filled with teen angst and writing is basically a way to talk about it without actually having to talk. Also, getting comments on it from people you dont know probably helps.

HighHopes 08-01-2005 06:32 PM

That was ****.I'm sorry but it was.

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