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Old 02-19-2017, 02:12 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Emotionless


With closed eyes and open hands
This pain has got to end
Im so restless when i sleep
Every thought of you makes me weep

So just tear me apart and leave me your scar
I never thought we'd get this far
Cause you will never see whats in my heart
With your blackened eyes ill give you time
To fall apart

Chorus

I wish i was emotionless emotionless
Motionless swept by the sea
I wish I was emotionless emotionless
Was this ever meant to be.


I tore you apart
cause you broke my heart
We are worlds apart
Left in the dark
But i can see your light inside of me.
Our 2 worlds were meant to be.

Chorus
I wish i was emotionless emotionless
Motionless swept by the sea
I wish I was emotionless emotionless
Was this ever meant to be

With the rising tide we both hide whats meant to be.
When two worlds collide judgment clouds your mind. You see.

Chorus
I wish i was emotionless emotionless
Motionless swept by the sea
I wish I was emotionless emotionless
Was this ever meant to be

Just open your eyes they are so perfect to me.
Now Forget the lies and go to sleep.

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Old 02-19-2017, 12:48 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I really Like your lyrics, they're sad but attention grabbing.
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Old 02-19-2017, 12:49 PM   #3 (permalink)
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is this toosik back as toothpick?
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Old 02-19-2017, 03:02 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Thanks. No im only new to this
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Old 02-20-2017, 04:06 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Your lyrics are really nice.. Thank you for sharing
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Old 02-20-2017, 04:46 PM   #6 (permalink)
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It would have been funny if you threw the word 'fart' in there.
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Old 02-26-2017, 07:11 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Make sure the black eyes have to do with dark despair in relationship.
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