very sad song;good things will come to those who dont dwell on the past and who look on the brighter side of things.people may judge you on appearance,but mostly its all in the persons head who is paranoid about what people think only you know the real you & nobody can judge you but yourself looking forward to reading more lyrics by you that have a better choice of words and a consistant rhyming scheme but other than that it was fair but a little violent and not really a good message.cheer up!

@HVYMTLROCK thanks, that's really insightful and true.

Your song is very passionate. No need to listen to others to draw power to your words. They work fine by themselves. They are yours and your feelings and no one elses. Very good my dear

OK thanks. I'll try to listen to them and then maybe I'll edit my song.

I can definately feel the passion you have, but I think you need to fine tune your craft a little. Start listening to the origins of emo music, such as Joy Divison, Minor Threat, Rites of Spring, The Smiths, Jawbreaker, Sunny day Real Estate,