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Old 12-01-2007, 06:45 AM  
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Arrow Take It To The Grave - give a listen and let me know, thanks

There’s times when you think you’ve just had enough. Songs just a descriptive feeling. Give a listen and drop a line if you want. Any feedback is appreciated.

Take It To The Grave

@ Lyneva Starbuck 10-21-07
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=664080

Your eyes tell a story
Your lips may never say
You can only hide the truth so long
It’ll come back for you one day

You’re looking on the outside
As another page is turned
Still you search for the next best thing
With all the paths you burn

So you can take it to the grave
All the things you can never say
Were no one could ever hear
All your thoughts now coming true
With so much you want to do
The time has past away, so now, your can take it to the grave

You’ll hear the words I’ll say
And go on with no blame
You’ll live your lies, and die with truth
Without feeling any shame

You’re looking on the outside
As another page is turned
Still you search for the next best thing
With all the paths you burn

So you can take it to the grave
All the things you can never say
Were no one could ever hear
All your thoughts now coming true
With so much you want to do
The time has past away, so now, your can take it to the grave

Thanks for the read. Give a listen
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=664080
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Old 12-01-2007, 07:52 AM  
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I dunno, pretty good sound but I don't really like the vocals. It sounds a bit Team America. The guitar solo doesn't really work either, but I like the drums.
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Old 12-03-2007, 08:42 PM  
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uhmm

yeah the vocals suck, i thought the guitar was OK but couldv ebeen better
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Old 12-03-2007, 08:55 PM  
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Wasn't very interesting. Honestly, I could go to the local exchange and grab ten cds full of this kind of stuff for under 5 bucks.

The vocals and the guitar weren't very moving or challenging. They congealed a bit. Same goes for the lyrics, I suppose.

Er, uh...no offense. Just being honest.
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Old 12-10-2007, 01:16 PM  
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Well none the less thanks for the reviews and replies. This was kind of an experiment, maybe gone a rye. Thanks though.
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Old 12-10-2007, 06:48 PM  
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Lyrics need a little work. I liked the direction they're going in, though.
I'll have a listen sometime in the near future.
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Old 12-26-2007, 05:57 AM  
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Thanks for the read. Hope you get a chance to listen.
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Old 12-26-2007, 11:48 AM  
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eh, the vocals aren't really that satisfying. it makes it seem like you aren't serious when your singing. not really a good thing. nice try though because the lyrics are...a bit off. i like the drums as well. great beats.
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Old 12-26-2007, 03:57 PM  
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Doesn't this share a title with a Fall Out Boy song? and lyrics too for that matter?
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Old 12-26-2007, 04:19 PM  
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Take This To Your Grave was a fall out boy album in 2003. not sure about the lyrics though.
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