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Old 02-14-2011, 10:28 PM   #31 (permalink)
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LUNELIGHT. How's it gooooing! I'm gonna comment on your lyrics "Unworthy Soul" cause they somehow spoke to me, cliche as that sounds. I just kinda get what they are and where they're coming from, because at the moment I'm feeling the same as you described. Almost. But anyways, a couple of lines that I liked were "Every road thus far i've followed to a dead end/Along the way I found and lost what I thought were friends." and "When winter turns the ripples above me to ice/So shall it freeze the pain in my eyes". Buuut, the only line that I thought to be slightly awkward was "Sinking, death embraces me. No light...". Don't get me wrong, there's nothing bad about it, it's just that where you placed it was kind of odd. To me. Anyways, good work, keep it up!
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