Originally Posted by djchameleon

Not bad. I can tell this was more like a free write yes?

When you work on your next one to post I would work on formating it a bit so that it's a bit easier on the eyes to read and I believe during the cuss bliss part, you might say that with pauses in between to emphasize the point of that a bit more. That's how I read it to myself as if there were pauses and I really liked that part.

Another part that stood out to me was the whole "we did it like Romans" part. I don't remember my world history too much but when I picture Romans , I picture them as fighters not people that run away like mice so that whole metaphor is a bit off imo.