Quote:
Originally Posted by amilia
Let me know what you think so far now this is my first post so take it easy 
title: Inspiration
Your like a dream...
its like your not even there.
i reach out to touch you, and you
disappear.
Your smile so sweet your my
inspiration.
My way through life
My desperation.
my goals
my dreams
my inspiration
my heart
my mind
my inspiration
You can take it all
And yes i know its very short right now cause its not finished :p and thats where it ends. Right now i am in the process of finishing, ill take any bad or good thoughts! |
I don't really like it. It sounds a little unoriginal but I think if you tried working it into a song it might not matter. Or maybe it if you try added some very particular things in it like a specific person or experience or some kind more specific feelings it would make it not seem so generic sounding.
Just my opinion of course.