Im not trying to be mean or anything just to be honest. This is filled with so many used cliches. Seeing light and rhyming it with holding tight seems like a super easy way out of a real rhyme. The chorus especially needs some personalization.
I think you are off to a good start and you clearly know how to go about writing a song. BUT keep in mind how many love songs have been written in history. Do you want this to get lost in the masses of democracy?
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