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Originally Posted by appleghost
I'd like to publish some of the things I write, short stories, song lyrics, poems, and I hope I'll get some constructive feedback 
Here's a poem I wrote a time ago. It's kind of short and abstract, but I like it. Hope you do so too:
we talk in monotone
silver shining through blue words
hands dangling, slow dances
to soulless chords on tired pianos
the sulking sounds of sobbing trumpets
joining our march
on our way
to whatever they demand |
I find "abstract" is a good way to go when writing lyrics. It add a magnetic mystery to the work and leaves it up to the reader to decide what it's about, which is much better than expressing a feeling in a more conventional way, jmo.
Anyway, very good work. I'm excited to see what the future holds for this thread. Keep writing, friend.