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Originally Posted by jordm
Hi just looking for some feedback on some lyrics i put together, nothing big just spent about 10 minutes on it so let me know what you think  |
I actually thought your lyrics were quite cute, jordm.
I wonder, though, why rappers seem so fixated on the idea of dominating others and being the best. The attempt to appear so capable and successful makes the rap artists look weaker in my eyes, since they seem to need to feel better than others to feel okay about themselves. Lyrics like yours make me think that the bragging hides insecurity. I think I'd prefer a rap song where the rapper says, "I'm not the best, because this ain't no competition. I do it 'cause I love it, not because I got ambition."
Although I'm not wild about the typical rap theme of the rapper being the best and squashing all competition, I do like how you illustrate this prowess using some amusing ("the power of my lyrics will squash you like a grape") and startling ("the force of my words could be mistaken for rape") analogies.
I especially liked the line, "Im'a be like the Spanish inquisition to a poor heathen," because of the historical element. You could make your lyrics even more politically charged by referring to the way the Spanish dominated and exterminated the native Indians of the New World (even severing their limbs and feeding them to dogs, apparently).
In case you someday want to make more references in your rap lyrics to disturbing historical times of domination, conquest, and genocide, I recommend you watch The Truth About Christopher Columbus and other conquerers from Europe who decimated the Indigenous peoples of the Americas, causing 100 million of them to die:
The Truth About Christopher Columbus and 1492
The Truth About Christopher Columbus and 1492 - YouTube