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Old 09-03-2012, 07:33 PM   #16 (permalink)
Trollheart
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Sorry, this one I hate. Just sounds like you're trying to be too clever, and mixing rhymes that really shouldn't --- "magarita/need a" --- I also don't get the same feeling of sincerity that came through the first song I commented on ("Electricity"?), not to mention that the whole idea of comparing love to being drunk doesn't sit too well with me, though I know that's not what you're going for.

Personally, based on your other lyrics I know you're better than this, and I'd ignore this one. But don't stop writing; you have some good ideas.


Quote:
Originally Posted by bayleegrl88 View Post
I can take two shots of cuervo
And still walk straight as an arrow
All you gotta do is press your lips on mine
And suddenly I drank two bottles of wine
Someone ought to put a warning label on you
Be careful how much you consume
Chorus:
I thought my tolerance was high
You came and took me by surprise
Topsy, turvy, you crossed my eyes
Give me this feeling
A feeling I can’t describe, but I guess it’s like
Beer goggles
(End Chorus)
Your lips are so delicious, like a margarita
So salty and sweet, how bad I need a
Drink of that loving, you got me tipsy
Grabbing onto you to hold me up, I’m acting ditzy
I can’t believe you made me this way
You’re 100 proof, I can’t get through a glass of you
So come what may
(Chorus)
Hung over on you, I’m waking up alone again
Trying to pretend everything’s ok on my walk of shame
But you stop by and flash a smile
My visions getting blurry, knowing all the while
A touch is like a daiquiri, a kiss a margarita
And when you pull me close to you, we can make a pina colada
Bridge:
After being near you
I could nearly get arrested
I couldn’t control what I could do
I asked for more when I shouldn’t have tested it
But I will never regret it
(End Bridge)
(Chorus)
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