It seems a little wordy and hard to piece together the rhyme or phonetic structure that would reveal itself in song form. If you could give me an idea of the melody/beat/tempo/genre of music? It's almost like asking you how does this sound LOL.....
The lyrics are solid. I don't know if this was created for someone you care about, but you can tell it comes from that special 'I'm in love with THE ONE' kind of place.
The only thing that holds me back from totally loving it is the naive nature of the song. For those of us that have been burned over and over its hard to let down your guard and hope that kind of person is out there for you. I always feel like 'this is too perfect, something is wrong here, my ass is about to get shot off'. And sadly its been the case more often than not that you count on a person without reservation and they fail you or you fail them in some way and the relationship falls apart, and a song like this one will piss you off to no end.
You want to sit down and write one of those 'Love doesn't exist' type songs LOL
Good job my friend, please keep it up!
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