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Old 02-17-2013, 03:57 AM   #1 (permalink)
Daniisarus
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Default Developing My Writing..

Hey, everyone.
Last time I came here, I was 14, and just wrote a song about a girl who sent me threats.
Well. In that space of a year I've been writing new stuff, and wanted more opinions on it

[This is only half a song, but it's more constructed than the other ones I've written xD

Sometimes I ponder.
Sometimes I wonder.
What could've been us.
What happened to the trust?

For too long I've worn my heart on my sleeve.
I'm not telling you how to live, but I'm telling you to leave.
Now, you ****ing bitch.

I'm guessing that'd be a first verse and a chorus, still working on stuff haha.
x)
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