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Old 11-01-2005, 04:19 AM   #4 (permalink)
DontRunMeOver
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Originally Posted by right-track
O.k. It's learned.

Also, I'd prefer if the 3 liners, had a fourth. (just for balance, mind!).

Just look me in the eye
Although a part of you has died
You can look me in the eye
Look deep inside my mind. (perhaps? Or repeat the second line, or a variation of it.)

Or... you can tell me to fuck off!
I won't be saying that to you, as you've just been more helpful than you probably realise! That was the line I was having most trouble with and you've just given me a new idea for how I can add something that fits there. Great help!

Keep the criticisms coming.
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