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Old 08-04-2013, 02:26 PM   #5 (permalink)
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To explain as best I can DJ, this is not a past love, we are still together and she (yes, she) presently knows me better than anyone else in this world because of our shared past. Make sense??
She knew you too well when she met you. That's why I feel that it should be past tense but it's your poem do as you like. :P

Just giving constructive criticism.

I used to have issues with switching tenses often throughout my work.
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