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Old 09-18-2015, 12:14 PM   #13 (permalink)
DemonicDax
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Originally Posted by Beyond Perception View Post
I dig it.. good message. Most can relate.

One suggestion if you're open to it, "Transforming all wrongs into rights." Might want to drop the 's' in both words. Think it syncs up a bit cleaner.

"This path
Is now clear.
In this illuminated night
The stars shine oh so bright.
Transforming all wrong into right."
Thanks for the input. Yeah, when I was writing that line I thought it sounded weird, but at the same time I wasn't sure if "All wrong into right" would be grammatically correct or not. I did think of changing it to that but I didn't because of the grammar, although in retrospect I suppose grammar doesn't always matter when it comes to song lyrics. So yeah, I'll probably change that line to your suggestion, it fits a lot better and doesn't sound so awkward.
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