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Old 09-18-2015, 11:14 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Oh crap, I didn't notice your comment, I'm rly sorry, my band >.<
What didn't you like about it?
Idk I didn't even read the lyrics. I'm just trolling.
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Old 09-18-2015, 11:54 AM   #12 (permalink)
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I dig it.. good message. Most can relate.

One suggestion if you're open to it, "Transforming all wrongs into rights." Might want to drop the 's' in both words. Think it syncs up a bit cleaner.

"This path
Is now clear.
In this illuminated night
The stars shine oh so bright.
Transforming all wrong into right."
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Old 09-18-2015, 12:14 PM   #13 (permalink)
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I dig it.. good message. Most can relate.

One suggestion if you're open to it, "Transforming all wrongs into rights." Might want to drop the 's' in both words. Think it syncs up a bit cleaner.

"This path
Is now clear.
In this illuminated night
The stars shine oh so bright.
Transforming all wrong into right."
Thanks for the input. Yeah, when I was writing that line I thought it sounded weird, but at the same time I wasn't sure if "All wrong into right" would be grammatically correct or not. I did think of changing it to that but I didn't because of the grammar, although in retrospect I suppose grammar doesn't always matter when it comes to song lyrics. So yeah, I'll probably change that line to your suggestion, it fits a lot better and doesn't sound so awkward.
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Old 09-18-2015, 12:18 PM   #14 (permalink)
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I did think of changing it to that but I didn't because of the grammar, although in retrospect I suppose grammar doesn't always matter when it comes to song lyrics.
All of the greats toss away grammar if it'll make a lyric flow better. You're good.
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Old 09-18-2015, 12:22 PM   #15 (permalink)
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All of the greats toss away grammar if it'll make a lyric flow better. You're good.
I suppose you're right, that notion might also get me out of a few jams while writing lines. Thanks for letting me know.
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Old 09-18-2015, 01:41 PM   #16 (permalink)
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Thanks for the input. Yeah, when I was writing that line I thought it sounded weird, but at the same time I wasn't sure if "All wrong into right" would be grammatically correct or not. I did think of changing it to that but I didn't because of the grammar, although in retrospect I suppose grammar doesn't always matter when it comes to song lyrics. So yeah, I'll probably change that line to your suggestion, it fits a lot better and doesn't sound so awkward.
Also, the word, 'rights', is often associated with:

plural noun: rights

a moral or legal entitlement to have or obtain something or to act in a certain way.
synonyms: entitlement, prerogative, privilege, advantage, due, birthright, liberty, authority, power, license, permission, dispensation, leave, sanction, freedom; historicaldroit
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Old 09-18-2015, 01:55 PM   #17 (permalink)
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Also, the word, 'rights', is often associated with:

plural noun: rights

a moral or legal entitlement to have or obtain something or to act in a certain way.
synonyms: entitlement, prerogative, privilege, advantage, due, birthright, liberty, authority, power, license, permission, dispensation, leave, sanction, freedom; historicaldroit
Thanks for letting me know, those synonyms could definitely help in the future
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Old 09-18-2015, 07:22 PM   #18 (permalink)
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Thanks for letting me know, those synonyms could definitely help in the future
For sure my friend. Let me know when you're performing the song live and if it's close enough to me in Florida, I'll come down and tell everyone that I helped write it..
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Did you actually write a song, or just the lyrics?

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For once we agree. Led Zeppelin sucks and Jimmy Page is a pedo.
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Old 09-18-2015, 08:48 PM   #20 (permalink)
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Did you actually write a song, or just the lyrics?



For once we agree. Led Zeppelin sucks and Jimmy Page is a pedo.
Well, I have written the lyrics and have a general idea of the melody of the song, and I am still working on transferring it to sheet music. If you are asking have I written the instrumentals for it yet, then no, I have not. That's kinda what I'm looking for a band for, so we can hammer out and finish the actual song and whatever songs are to be written in the future.

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