General is often bad. If you don't explain things no one will pay attention. I don't care who you're writing for, but rock critics and lit professors are all going to say this very same thing; we want to know
1. Why is there a comfort, what kind of comfort is it.
2. Why doesn't anyone care?
3. Why either black or white? Why not other colors? Why not both.
"Depending on what you did" is not what you want at all. That leave everything before it completly subject to change.
Its like "hey all this **** could happen...depends on what you did, if its the wrong thing, well...just disregard everythign you jsut read."
When I hear Bob Dylan's "tangled up in blue" and he says he's leant a bok of poetry, I know what century that poetrys from, and I know his reaction to it. I don't need to know who wrote it, because it's probably negligible, he gave me information though to show why its pertenant to the story.
Now if you read the lyrics to something less specific like Lonly Day by SOAD
"The most loneliest day of my life
Such a lonely day
Shouldn't exist
A day that Ill never miss
Such a lonely day
And its mine
The most loneliest day of my life"
Well you decide which song writer you want to be associated with more.
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