I like it, it's straightforward without being too blunt, nice metaphors and subtlety without being too garbled. I think it's great as it is (short and simple), but like so many really good, short songs, I find myself wondering what would happen if you expanded on it and added some verses. You've got a really great thing going on, and it may be that by adding verses you kill it, but I think it's worth experimenting with.
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