The Sound Of Ten Thousand Things Breaking All At Once (songs, Organ)

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 01-17-2006, 01:14 PM

The Sound Of Ten Thousand Things Breaking All At Once

It's really hard to catch knives with just your throat
when all you have
is a paper neck and poreclain organs
but like flowers,we grow
and then we fall apart
were falling apart in so many ways
If I never see you again
it will be the same
as every day we
express through these breaths
we take in our chests
breathe into my lungs
and your cold embrace
encloses me
(straight through my heart)
and I silently walk off the novels edge
and fall between chapters
and die in the margins

Crazy Luv · 01-17-2006, 02:32 PM

it might be good, but i got lost many places...

either/or · 01-17-2006, 03:49 PM

ahhh very clever.

jibber · 01-17-2006, 08:09 PM

I like it, it's straightforward without being too blunt, nice metaphors and subtlety without being too garbled. I think it's great as it is (short and simple), but like so many really good, short songs, I find myself wondering what would happen if you expanded on it and added some verses. You've got a really great thing going on, and it may be that by adding verses you kill it, but I think it's worth experimenting with.

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 01-18-2006, 04:20 AM

I'll experiment

01-17-2006, 01:14 PM	#1 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	The Sound Of Ten Thousand Things Breaking All At Once The Sound Of Ten Thousand Things Breaking All At Once It's really hard to catch knives with just your throat when all you have is a paper neck and poreclain organs but like flowers,we grow and then we fall apart were falling apart in so many ways If I never see you again it will be the same as every day we express through these breaths we take in our chests breathe into my lungs and your cold embrace encloses me (straight through my heart) and I silently walk off the novels edge and fall between chapters and die in the margins __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

01-17-2006, 03:49 PM	#3 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	ahhh very clever. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

01-17-2006, 08:09 PM	#4 (permalink)
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople... Posts: 1,536	I like it, it's straightforward without being too blunt, nice metaphors and subtlety without being too garbled. I think it's great as it is (short and simple), but like so many really good, short songs, I find myself wondering what would happen if you expanded on it and added some verses. You've got a really great thing going on, and it may be that by adding verses you kill it, but I think it's worth experimenting with. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

01-18-2006, 04:20 AM	#5 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	I'll experiment __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

01-17-2006, 02:32 PM	#2 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	it might be good, but i got lost many places...