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Old 01-20-2006, 08:13 PM   #2 (permalink)
creepinson
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holy crap no definitions

although the rhythmic flow is acceptable (only barely, thanks to terribly forced rhymes) the flow between ideas is terrible

nothing ties in with the last, and it just seems like a jumble of words... i would be amazed if you could tell me what its about, because it seems like you just did your best to piece some pretty words together... really cosmetic really shallow... have a nice ****in day
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