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Originally Posted by hobojesus
My family is altogether/
Here at last like the old times/
I'm with the people that I love/
happiness like this, there's no other kind/
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i really liked this. The only thing that i see that needs to be fixed is the ending. Its too short, while everything has more length.
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Originally Posted by hobojesus
The Monks put on their armour/
and they fight to the death/
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Wouldnt it be
their death