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Old 02-26-2017, 06:35 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I broke my Oppressive Awakening down like this:

Life is a trade-off
In the quest for peace
Of mind of matter
Of beauty of beast

The longer the time
entrenched in mind
The pain so intense
Frustration immense

Don't smile on me sun
You know not my heart
The shattered glass
Which rips me apart

As I walk alone
And hold off defeat
Know of my struggle
As I know your heat

It may not work for you, I'm kind of old school, but your lyrics are sound, deep, and they do flow in how you put them together. Just a thought.
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