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DontRunMeOver · 02-02-2006, 09:54 AM

I'd agree with Crazy luv about the first verse. If you take the first work away the lyric works better. This is because then the opening lyrics are 'You took advantage, girl with the bandage' which sets out the theme of the song in a clear and punchy way. Starting off with 'shes never before etc.' was just a bit confusing, vague, low impact (you get what I mean).

You could maybe add a verse at the end with the 'knows shes done something wrong' idea from the first verse there instead, as then it alludes to the effect which the guy's actions had on the girl.

02-02-2006, 09:54 AM	#3 (permalink)
DontRunMeOver They call me Tundra Boy Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: In your linen cupboard. Posts: 1,166	I'd agree with Crazy luv about the first verse. If you take the first work away the lyric works better. This is because then the opening lyrics are 'You took advantage, girl with the bandage' which sets out the theme of the song in a clear and punchy way. Starting off with 'shes never before etc.' was just a bit confusing, vague, low impact (you get what I mean). You could maybe add a verse at the end with the 'knows shes done something wrong' idea from the first verse there instead, as then it alludes to the effect which the guy's actions had on the girl.