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Old 02-01-2006, 03:58 AM   #1 (permalink)
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I know this is really sick, but the title of this song was a little play on words... don't ask me what goes inside my head...


She-has never before/
she's never before/
thought she had once before/
but no-she was lying all along/
now she knows she's done something wrong/
but she doesn't know what/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
She just wants to know her way/
She just wants to know her way back home/

You-You took advantage/
Little girl with the bandage/
walking home alone on a dark dark night/
she-she didn't know what to do/
she'd been told about guys like you/
and what they do/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
She just wants to know/
She just wants to know her way back home/

She-she stepped inside your car/
You-you took her far, far away/
She-she didn't know what was going on/
she told you the way you were taking was wrong/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
She just wants to know/
She just wants to know her way back home/

You-you pulled up outside the barn/
you said that you owned this farm/
she nodded in fright/
you-you held her hand and lead her inside/
you hit her down and opened her eyes wide/
this went on all night/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
She just wants to know/
She just wants to know her way back home/

She-she struggled with all her might/
you-you really enjoyed the fight/
it made you feel like a man/
She-she told you to stop it/
you ripped off her locket/
and started on her again/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
Leave her alone/
She just wants to know/
She just wants to know her way back home/
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Old 02-01-2006, 01:20 PM   #2 (permalink)
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The first verse i didnt like, but as it went on, i grew to like it. now...
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you-you held her hand and lead her inside/
you hit her down and opened her eyes wide/
this went on all night/
you should had she infront of opened & behind and. I think it would make more sense that way.

As i said, i like it, but i want to know what happens next...
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Old 02-02-2006, 09:54 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I'd agree with Crazy luv about the first verse. If you take the first work away the lyric works better. This is because then the opening lyrics are 'You took advantage, girl with the bandage' which sets out the theme of the song in a clear and punchy way. Starting off with 'shes never before etc.' was just a bit confusing, vague, low impact (you get what I mean).

You could maybe add a verse at the end with the 'knows shes done something wrong' idea from the first verse there instead, as then it alludes to the effect which the guy's actions had on the girl.
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Old 02-02-2006, 01:31 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Well with the eyes opened wide part I meant that the guy pulled her eyes open wide, not the girl opened them. I was going to talk about how the girls opened her eyes wide but I thought it would be stupid that the girl would open her eyes wide through all this. Thanks for the help anyways
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