For lyrical purposes in a song as repetition in an outro for example I think it's fine. So far as poetry I think it's excessive. In the line itself the word "now" feels like filler which if you need to sing an extra sllyable there to fit the melody (or for meter in poetry) I suppose I can accept that, although barely. Some use of filler is less obvious than others though so it depends on your construction too.
If these are song lyrics and you should try to keep choruses seperately from verses as well as outros and so on by always using line spaces in between.
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