again, this depends on the format, whether it be song or spoken word, or simply poetry, but I rather prefer this one. I am a big fan of internal rhyming and here:
Quote:
I've been here before
A shattered jaw
An elbow in the gut
A well taken choice
In quiet rejoice
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and here:
Quote:
I've been here before
Bloodied and raw
From loyalties misplaced
I have no delusions
It was illusions
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the fast rhyming between the large rhymes sounded really good.
but the italicised (sp?) could be re-arranged.