I think this is generally very good, although it'd be helpful if you visually seperated it into verse/chorus etc. for us. I would say though, that I'm not sure I understand the sentiment when the verse and chorus seem to contradict each other. Meaning:
In the later verses you seem to be saying that the girl is desperate, clingy and suffocating, whereas in the choruses you say that she doesn't lean, cling or need (but say that she suffocates again). This is a bit confusing.
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Originally Posted by Katyppfan
When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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