Hey you over there with the long hair
Will you lean over here and tell me your fears
Answer my question, was I wrong?
All I wanted was for you to see
That you are the only thing that meant anything to me
I tried... I couldn’t see past your ****ing eyes
You whispered softly in my ears
Replacing love with your desperate fears
I swore to you I wouldn’t leave
I made a promise that I would always keep
Never once did I question you
I always believed the words you said
Just like I believed you took no one else to bed
As if I couldn’t walk no more
I stumbled across that wooden floor
I screamed at you..and pushed you away
I made you feel like trash that day
As if I could ever do such a thing
It was a dream just like every meaningful thing you ever said
red i liked
italized is what i think it should be like
regular needs to be reworded some how
green i dont get
purple, you made a desperate jump from one buiding to the other, and didnt make it, but i still like(and get) what you are saying
theres something else that needs to be done badly, but i dont know how to explain it
edit: maybe make the stanzas link more to each other
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